Winds fly bleak across snowswept fields
the first frost withers the harvest
fallen to wait for the fires of summer
From here on high where the candles burn low
the darkness hides all and the blizzard howls
one voice of a world covered in shadow
the long months breaking like endless waves
high upon the hills and in the drowned valleys
where the last of the revellers lie frozen in the streets
blood thin and crystallized in sleeping veins
eyes open on the coming of Winter
and yet no thought but of the distant warmth of Spring
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Got another story rejected by a lit. magazine. Have to keep getting better, I suppose. Got to keep trying.
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Photo by David Hellmann on Unsplash
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14 responses to “In the Drowned Valleys”
Sorry about the rejection. I think the keep trying part is the most important. Getting better will just come naturally.
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Cheers to that! Thanks (:
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Hi Mitch, this is a lovely very visual poem. I tend to love work that involves the water, I suppose it is because I am so drown to the ocean. I love all your lines –
“blood thin and crystallized in sleeping veins”
Great work and I know it is very difficult to get those rejections myself, but I just keep pounding away. Keep on writing and submitting if it is important to you. That is what I am doing and you definitely have talent. Stay safe and blessed. Hugs, Joni
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Thanks a ton Joni (: always appreciate reading your comments. I’m with you, gotta keep submitting!
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Yea those rejects sting a little but we have to believe in our work. Everyone’s taste is so different and editors are no different. Your work is really beautiful and has a dark tone much of the time that I really like. Sending hugs and inspiration. ❤️Joni
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Well thanks a lot! I appreciate that so much (: your work, also, has an almost musical quality to it that I always appreciate. We’ll make it through the veil to the other side for sure!
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Yes, thank you for the kind words Mitch. We can travel through that veil. I know you will your writing is excellent. Sending hugs and stay safe. Love ❤️ Joni
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They don’t know how to pick em’
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I appreciate that! Cheers (:
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Good visual in this one.
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Keep going!
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Will do (; cheers!
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Don’t give up 🙂 It’s not always about getting better, sometimes you just need to find the one place that shares your vision…
Good luck!
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Thanks (: will definitely keep pushing.
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