The road runs ahead along a razorβs edge to the mountains, but the heat coming off it gives it the look of a ribbon in wind. Long stretches of it seem to be melting away into the sand. Itβs easy to imagine this desert is left over from some apocalypse, and the AC blasting across our faces is a shield against the fallout.
We keep the music loud.
He glances over to me in the passenger seat, leaned back in it, my hair blowing wild in the cold recirculating air, singing loudly along to Creedence Clearwater Revival. One corner of his mouth is always smirking. He pushes the gas harder, and we tear along like a bullet through the world.
I love the way he looks at me when he thinks I donβt notice.
The way the world blurs as it passes by us makes it seem like weβre time travelling. If we are, then soon the desert really will lead us to nowhere. At night, the stars will come out and weβll see what weβve been missing. On and on over mile after mile through the heat of this bone-dry land I hope we never stop speeding.
When I wake, the car is slowing. I didnβt mean to fall asleep. Heβs pulling over to the shoulder as I rub my eyes and try to see into the night that’s fallen outside the car.
βWhy are we stopping?β I ask. He says nothing, only stares straight ahead, or maybe upward, I canβt tell. Then heβs squinting, his hands on top of the steering wheel, leaning forward as far as he can and twisting his neck to see up and out of the windshield. βWhat is it?β
He grips the door handle and opens it to let in the dry desert air. I shiver as it passes over me. He climbs out and begins walking away from the car.
βThereβs something in the sky,β he says.
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To be continued…?
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14 responses to “Creedence”
Please continue! I am enjoying it.π
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I agree, this is a good start to a story
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Much appreciated!
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Thanks Susan! This one may end up being my next project…
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Yes! I agree. I would totally read this!
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Thanks so much! I have a few ideas for it, so we’ll see what happens next. I appreciate you stopping by (:
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Great start to a novel! Or just leave it as it is, very fine either way.
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What’s in the sky? Great teaser to get one to think of the possibilities…
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Thanks! Now I have to continue it and find out the answer (:
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[…] is a continuation of a short I posted a while back, which you can read here. Please forgive my clumsy voice acting. I have some ideas for continuing it even further, so […]
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A nice hook of an opening paragraph. The “a/c as fallout shield” is original. Love the loud music component; I’m sure it was tempting to name a track, but not doing so leaves it open to the imagination.
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Thanks so much! (: I’m glad you enjoyed it. I’ve been formulating a response to the email you sent me–sorry it’s taken a bit for me to get back!
I definitely had a track in mind, but it felt right to just leave it with naming the band. Thanks again! Cheers
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Reblogged this on The Nostromo Files and commented:
This short story starts with a slow burn, but Mitch’s evocative language makes its mystery more than bearable. This might have been an episode of “The X-Files” (in some alternate reality). Enjoy! …and see the link to Part 2.
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Thanks so much for the reblog!
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